4 replies to this topic

[IIamfish98]

Imran’s wonder-legitness poem ting ‘Ten Things I ‘Love’ About You’

If I were to put all the things I ‘love’ about you in this poem it would be absurd;

It would be very complicated because you are quite the turd.

But that’s just me.

‘It’s not you; it’s me’ that’s the line they all say to get it over and done with.

It’s over;

It’s done with.

Problem?

Might as well add something positive;

You are very provocative -

But not is that sense, I am not a perv.

You are able to create a hullabaloo;

Over a piece of poo.

Good or what, ‘cause I am jealous,

I would love to be able to create overzealous arguments.

Where you create a syndicate,

Where it is hard for you to indicate;

Where I am,

Where I should be.

Sorry for being too positive;

I was just trying to be insightful;

Being truthful –

Though the truth may hurt;

It doesn’t equate to how much I hurt now.

Ten things?

That’s way too much for an ‘adult’ who is 14 can handle.

So yeah that’s that.

This is this.

You only live once, so make sure you get to have some fun.

Imran Khan

I had to write a poem based on the film 10 Things I hate about you, my teacher said we could do love or hate, so I sat on the fence and did a sort of ironic poem?

Anyways tell me what you think ^.^

[Sweetneat]

It sounds great, Things people can relate too, it's smart,
There are parts which I think are worded quite.. well childlike, whilst the rest is worded more adultlike (make any sense?)

The only thing is that small parts of the poem I feel like is missing a flow.

Hope this doesn't sound too negative! I really like it is pretty good

[IIamfish98]

Thanks for the feed back, I am 14 so I am still a child and yes I do understand what you mean by the childish and adult like changes and st00fs

[Ladylee06]

hehe it's cute how you referred to yourself as a child.

But good job! I liked it!

[IIamfish98]

hehe it's cute how you referred to yourself as a child.

But good job! I liked it!

Thank you

I want to stay forever young :3